So yeah, here goes nothing.
In this thread I will keep you updated on the progression of the comic I'm working on of which the title should be clear by now.
The reason for this being here is for you guys to be able to give me feedback, advice, inspiration and ideas.
I will hide sketches and "in progress" pictures in spoiler tags for those who don't want to read a new page until it's fully complete.
The same goes for the storyline and the discussion of it.
If you comment on anything within spoilers please do not spoil anything for those people. Use sp's or spoilers instead (don't overdo it though).
I'm asking for critique to improve myself and to refrain myself from falling into a "tunnel vision" mode where I can only see what's on my mind and not the total picture.
When you spot something that doesn't really feel right, try to pin down what the actual problem is and how I could solve it.
I'm okay with people telling that something doesn't look right, but I don't want to butcher an image completely before I can figure out what seems wrong in your eyes or how I can fix it.
The sketches are mostly there for critique on frame layout and such. Don't focus on too much detail for these, just the layout.
I'll tell you my process just so you can keep certain things in mind when you give advice. Or for if you're just curious. I work at my own pace and when I feel like it, so it won't progress that fast. Although a little motivation never hurts.
The beginning of the story:
Non spoiling version:
This is more of an intro to the story:
Spoiling version:A stallion known by the name Commander Scoops and his team were ordered to clear a specific resourceful area from danger so a new town can be built. It's far away from Ponyville and Canterlot, a distance that was only doable for pegasi to fly in a full day.
Commander Scoops' daughter Sundae was dragged along and had no choice but to live in this newborn town. With her passion for Ice Cream she started a small Ice Cream shop. She doesn't get much customers during the week, but the workers who are busy building this town are more than happy to feast on Sundae's delicious specialty sorbets in the weekends. With that Sundae is still capable of raking in a profit.
Sadly she spends weeks alone at home, as her father only stops by once a month to restock on supplies.
"The terrain is quite rough on us and the general area around the town still hasn't been explored thoroughly. Nor cleared from potential dangers."
That's what he'd say if Sundae asked if he could come home more often. Nevertheless, she knew her dad cherished her more than anything.
With no friends in this new town, no fun and just endless days of work she can only hope her father comes back with the great news that his mission is finally over...
Yes, it really spoils the story for you. But also here critique is welcome. So please don't read this if you are really looking forward to the comic itself. The Comic:
Here I'll post the completed pages, sketches and everything else I upload.
Be aware that if you don't like spoilers you shouldn't be clicking the sketches.
Page 0 - The Cover
Sketches and incomplete pages: Thank you for reading.